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When i see him i can feel my heart beat 20 times faster When i see him smile i feel like the luckiest girl in the world

When i hear his voice my heart beats 40 times faster

When i hear his guitar i smile with joy

When i hear our favorite song my heart beats 50 times more faster

When i think of think of him i can feel my heart best 60 more times faster

When i know he there at the same time as me my heart beats 70 more times faster

When his hair falls in front of his eyes my heart beat 80 times faster

When i look into his deep brown eyes and he looks into my blue ones time feels like it freezes and i can feel my heart beat 90times faster

But now hes off to a place ill never be i can feel my heart pour into little pieces like pouring rain in april.

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Its great!! :)

i loved it

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It's long, but sweet.

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I see you have a motif you are after, but the repetition of the first few words of each line that many times becomes irritating. And the use of numbers - 20 X, 30 X 40 X, 50 X, etc -- seems like a quickie solution in place of more penetrating language or thought.

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no . not so rytaemicand ryming

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a sad ending but very romantic yeah i do like it